SLSL "TSR" - climax, anti-climax

[William Zantzinger]

--- Dave Meury <dmeury at lioninc.com> wrote:
> Doug wrote:
> >"list of enumerated wares: scissors, watches,
> knives, ribands, laces"
> -- enumerated where? 
> 
> 
> In a song Little Buttercup sings in HMS Pinafore:
> 
>  
> I've snuff and tobaccy, and excellent jacky, 
> I've scissors, and watches, and knives; 
> I've ribbons and laces to set off the faces 
> Of pretty young sweethearts and wives.

If P were to do a wall-to-wall rewrite of this story I
think MMS Pinafore would be tossed in the dumpster.
The fancy writing at the end, part apprentice make it
literary show off stage one of Anxiety of Influence
and part social censorship and part pre-adult sexual
angst, 
would be torn up, pulled down, dragged out, dumped. 

What would P do with Little Buttercup? Make her a
fairy princess or witch? What? 

I'm starting to think this book could be useful to
apprentice writers after all. Let's tear it down to
the frame, square it, plumb it, level it...ah,
demolish it...let's start fresh. 


 To an apprentice a hammer is like brick tied to  her
wrist with a rope. when she swings it, LOOK OUT! She
will do more damage to her thumb and index finger, the
materials to be nailed down...and YOU ..look
out...nails ricocheting....but a master can hold a
fist full of spikes in his palm, rotate them  rapidly
between his index and middle finger and drive them
flush with a single blow. Reach in your nail pouch,
son, and write. 


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