It's hard to believe Thomas Pynchon wrote a sentence as bad as this one

[Paul Mackin]

After she had given in to the notion of being
> doubled up on, she
> >found herself going out of the way looking for it,
> usually one in her
> >mouth, the other from behind, sometimes in her ass, so
> she got quickly
> >used to tasting her own fluids mixed with shit."


Bad writing? Yes, too much high-falutin' authorial presence.

'given in to the notion"

"found herself"

"her own fluids"

Needs to be rewritten from pov of an uneducated miner's daughter.

"At first talkin' on both of 'em at once was too much, but  truth be told  two cocks in her instead of one was great, except half the time  (those bastards) the guy she was blowin' tasted as much like shit as pussy."

P.
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