3rd copy editing issue in Marguerite Young's Debs bio

[peterthooper at juno.com]

It's a really good book! Good to know you like it too.

There are so many interesting digressions, each relevant anyway, even though it's clearly a digression.

The easily available stuff I've looked at on the Internet indicates she was a Bohemian living in Greenwich Village, wearing some kind of distinctive footwear- Tarantino 10 should be a biopic?!

Knew everyone. Did cool things.

When she got robbed her friends organized her notes.

When she got ill her sister moved her back home to Indiana and recreated her NY apartment for her there.

When she died, her publisher assembled the book, and an editor added a lot of the material about other people - there's a switch, don't they usually cut? But it's so great that he did!

My freelance copy editing is only out of love. 

HSfaR - really sublime. 


---------- Original Message ----------
From: Richard Romeo <richard.romeo at gmail.com>
To: "peterthooper at juno.com" <peterthooper at juno.com>
Cc: pynchon-l at waste.org
Subject: Re: 3rd copy editing issue in Marguerite Young's Debs bio
Date: Sat, 19 Oct 2019 23:43:57 -0400

I’m just glad you’re reading it. Never thought I’d meet another. 

I may read it again. Probably appreciate it more in my dotage 

Terre Haute comes up in conversation I have something to talk about. Though I have been. I don’t remember if Debs was remembered fondly (sadly)

PS U ever wonder what kind of sex life Clausewitz had? 

rich

> On Oct 18, 2019, at 9:46 PM, "peterthooper at juno.com" <peterthooper at juno.com> wrote:
> 
> The first one I posted was just me questioning a phrase, so it didn't count.
> 
> The real first one was 2 sentences that should have been one.
> 
> The 2nd one was a run on sentence that should have been 2.
> 
> This one is an unnecessary "and".
> 
> "Joseph Smith had first become the robber bridegroom when he had fled with the love-smitten Emma Hale over the border to New York, where he had not abandoned her in a murky marshland nor drowned her in a lily-margined pool nor left her to find her own way back to her father as a villain might have done but had married her in the sight of God and the manifestation of law who appeared in the form of the man who tied the knot and where he had lustily, crowingly placed his little man in her virginal body, that which for a young man who in spite of his missing bones suffered from an overplus of vitality with its divine sparks and not the witherings of sterility in a desert land where no water was and must have seemed to him a cave hung with the most refulgent and yet taciturn, mysterious jewels where he had reigned supreme before he was born from immortality into mortality and to which he like many utopian dreamers and some who might be simple dreamers wished to return as to immortality.
> 
> Beautiful sentence, night wahr?
> 
> But if, like von Clausewitz, we encircle a certain independent clause ---
> 
> ...her virginal body, that which (for a young man, who in spite of his missing bones suffered from an overplus of vitality with its divine sparks and not the witherings of sterility in a desert land where no water was) and must have seemed to him...
> 
> So wait,
> "her virginal body,
> that which and must have seemed to him ..."
> 
> No, no, a thousand times no!
> Out, d-mned "and"!
> 
> I've x-ed it out in my copy.
> 
> 
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